Employers should give their staff at least 4 weeks' holiday every year to make them perform better at their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the current fast-paced world, many people are working relentlessly.

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may lead to stress and other mental health issues. So, every employee should spend a minimum of time with family members inside the country or outside of the country.

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, if they have at least 4 weeks of holidays every year provided by their employer. I totally agree with

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act to get better results.

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, nowadays, the job market is globalized

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. There are no boundaries to work and

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in one destination. Most youngsters are finishing their graduation from top universities around the world. After their graduation, they start work in that particular area. In spite of a job, they want to travel to their country and spend with family members and friends. So, if their company

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1 month's leave they can

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relax and refresh.

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, many Indians work in other countries for better salaries, and they will travel yearly once to their home to celebrate festivals with blood relatives.

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, they are getting one month of paid vacation with air tickets.

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, as noticed globetrotting is famous now. Many individuals

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social media accounts and post travel vlogs about how they feel about that location and how to reach there.

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, the "Naa Anveshna"

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vlogger explored more than 100 countries and posted on the internet and it

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viral. By the way, he got money and was famous for travelling. Fortunately, he had one month of vacation every year. So, he spent his time in

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way.

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, some quality time is required to refresh from duty stress and it's

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recommended by educationalists. If entities are caring for their workers, they have to provide some holidays with the pay.

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Ensure that the essay directly addresses the question prompt and provides a clear position on the issue of paid leave. Also, develop the essay with more depth and provide a balanced argumentation.

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The essay exhibits a fairly clear structure with an evident introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, pay attention to the organization within paragraphs to enhance coherence.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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4 paragraphs

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