The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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the
Correct article usage
apply

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information about graduate and postgraduate students of different types of future
plane
Correct your spelling
plans

The word plane doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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without full-time
work
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

in the UK in 2008.
Overall
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, an obvious feature is that all types of destination
were remained
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remained
have remained

It appears you have attempted to use the intransitive verb remained in a passive voice construction. Consider writing the sentence in the active voice.

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the
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at the

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same rank for both of the two bar charts. Students who opted
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

further
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for further

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study where occupy the majority and the voluntary
work
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were
fewest
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the fewest

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people to choose
for
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from

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both. Most graduates went to do
further
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

study, the number
were
Change the verb form
was

The verb were does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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almost to reach 30,000.
Conversely
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, Voluntary
work
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

were
Change the verb form
was

The plural verb were does not appear to agree with the singular subject work. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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unpopular, at 3,500. Part-time
work
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and Unemployment where shared
the
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a

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similar number for graduates,
which
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apply

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at 17,735 and 16,235 respectively. Notably, the number of postgraduates who did the
further
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

study was similar to part-time
work
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

people, they only got a gap of 190 people.
Postgraduate
Fix the agreement mistake
Postgraduates

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who
unemployed
Add a missing verb
were unemployed

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were at 1,625 and
who
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those who

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did voluntary were the fewest
by
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apply

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others,
which
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apply

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only at 345.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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