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GENERAL TRAINING ONLY You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Each year, your company gives an Employee of the Year award to a worker who has performed exceptionally well. You believe that someone with whom you work should receive the award this year. Write a letter to your supervisor. In the letter - Describe your colleague’s job at the company - Describe a time you worked with this person - Explain why you believe this person deserves the award Write at least 150 words You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Ms. Jackson,

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Dear
Ms
. Jackson, I would like to attract your attention
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 the exceptional work
Ms.
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 Diana
Thompson
 has been consistently delivering over the past 12 months. Doing so, I hope you will consider her for the Employee of the Year award.
Ms
Thompson
 works as a sales representative in our department since 2015. Her role mostly covers quotations, negotiation, and communication with customers. We worked together on many occasions as I am in charge of coordinating clients' payments.
Last
 week,
Ms
Thompson
 prepared a list of all delayed invoices and shared it with our team at the finance department.
This
 document helped us prepare an accurate
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 of the situation for the end-of-month presentation.
While
 she always demonstrated a strong motivation from the first day she joined our corporation,
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Thompson
 is now bringing additional added value to our organization. As the most experienced employee in the commercial team, she is
also
 able to offer coaching to newcomers.
Therefore
, I would kindly suggest you
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acknowledge her attitude and achievements at the award ceremony next month. I strongly believe that
such
 recognition will increase her satisfaction and encourage her to stay in our company. Best regards, Nathan Conil
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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