The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
The given bar graph reveals the amount of leisure
time
of a population in a week according to
their sex and employment status between 1998-1999. Overall
, females
who were part-time
employees or housewives
had more spare time
rather than their male counterparts. In contrast
, unemployed, retired or full-time
worked males
had much more free time
than the female group.
From 1998 to 1999, there are
no leisure Change the verb form
is
time
for males
was demonstrated for employed part-time
and housewives
categories. Employed part-time
worked females
, on the other hand
, had approximately 40 hours
of spare time
, and this
time
relatively
higher for Add a missing verb
was relatively
housewives
. Nearly 50 hours
free
Change preposition
of free
time
per week was recorded for housewives
in the period of 1998-99.
Full-time
employed males
and females
both had the least hours
of time
compared to their other gender groups. Men had extra 10 hours
than women in the group of full-time
occupation
. Fix the agreement mistake
occupations
Moreover
, unemployed and retired males
and females
had the most significant leisure time
in 1998-1999. Therefore
, the extra time
for both genders relatively
equal for each Add a missing verb
is relatively
groups
.Change to a singular noun
group
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, females, housewives, males, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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