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The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The given chart illustrates the expenditure on fast food by
income
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groups
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 in Britain; meanwhile, the graph depicts the trends consumption of junk food.
Overall
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,
hamburgers
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 and
pizza
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 are highly consumed by
people
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 with high and average incomes.
Fish
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 and cheaps popular among average and low-
income
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groups
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. The trends for
pizza
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 and
hamburgers
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 increased but
pizza
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 decreased. In 1985 the consumption of
pizza
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,
fish
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, and chips was the same amount.
To begin
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 with,
people
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 with high
income
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 consumed
hamburgers
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 at 43
pence
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 per person per week, the average
income
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groups
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 spent 33
pence
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, and low-
income
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people
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 allocated 14
pence
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.
Fish
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 and chips became famous among
people
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 with an average
income
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 and spent 33
pence
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.
In addition
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, Low-
income
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groups
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 spent 17
pence
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, and netizens with high
income
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 allocated 18
pence
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. High-
income
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people
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 expended 19
pence
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 on
pizza
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, followed by a group with an average
income
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 of 12
pence
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, and
finally
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, low-
income
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 communities spent 7
pence
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. The second graph shows netizens who ate
pizza
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 in 1970 started at 50
grams
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 and experienced a rose every 5 years, and in 1990 it was the highest at 280
grams
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.
However
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, In 1970, the public consumed
hamburgers
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 at 90
grams
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 and extremely rose to above 500
grams
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 in 1990.
Fish
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 and chips in 1970 were 305
grams
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 and fell to 200
grams
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 in 1985 before increasing to 240
grams
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 in 1990.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, groups, hamburgers, pizza, people, fish, pence, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Fast food
  • Income groups
  • High-income
  • Low-income
  • Medium-income
  • Hamburgers
  • Fried chicken
  • Fish & chips
  • Consumption
  • Trends
  • Significant increase
  • Decline
  • Popularity
  • Spending patterns
  • Consumption trends
  • Lifestyle
  • Preferences
  • Prices
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