Job satisfaction is more important than big salary. Do you agree or disagree?

Currently
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Currently,
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more
people
will choose a big
salary
because they always follow the new fashion, and follow the ego
for
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to
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have a new product. I strongly agree for big
salary
important than
job
satisfaction
I will explain more below:
Firstly
, why I am
choose
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agree because in my opinion
money
is everything if you want to buy something you must have
money
, explain other
people
always need
money
for bought
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to buy
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something,
money
is important in the word you can buy something, you can go everywhere if you have
money
. If you
stressed
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are stressed
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at
the
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apply
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work you can holiday for the stress release and
holiday
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a holiday
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need
money
for going
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to go
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. Another point
in
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to
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consider,
many
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is many
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people
want to nig
salary
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a salary
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than
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more than
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job
satisfaction
and don’t care about
job
satisfaction
because focus many
people
just big
salary
and as long as I have
money
I can do anything can go anywhere and I can buy something if I want the item that, many
people
always want to have a
lot
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lot of
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money
for the following new trend fashion, new technology.
This
is a habit
that is
often done by many
people
. In conclusion, there
is
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are
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many
people
have
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who have
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the
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apply
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ego
satisfaction
for
choose
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choosing
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big
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a big
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salary
than
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rather than
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job
satisfaction
.
The
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other side many
people
things
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think
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lifestyle is important for the social club or
fashionable
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fashion
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, in the era right now everything
need
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needs
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money
if you
want
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want to
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have something and most
people
want to have a
lot
Add the preposition
lot of
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money
.
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