Job satisfaction is more important than big salary. Do you agree or disagree?

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more
people
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will choose a big
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because they always follow the new fashion, and follow the ego
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have a new product. I strongly agree for big
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important than
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satisfaction
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I will explain more below:
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agree because in my opinion
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is everything if you want to buy something you must have
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, explain other
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always need
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for bought
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something,
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is important in the word you can buy something, you can go everywhere if you have
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. If you
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at
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work you can holiday for the stress release and
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a holiday
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need
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for going
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consider,
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people
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want to nig
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salary
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a salary
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than
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more than
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job
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satisfaction
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and don’t care about
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satisfaction
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because focus many
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just big
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and as long as I have
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I can do anything can go anywhere and I can buy something if I want the item that, many
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always want to have a
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money
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for the following new trend fashion, new technology.
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. In conclusion, there
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many
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have
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who have
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ego
satisfaction
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for
choose
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big
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a big
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salary
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than
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job
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satisfaction
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.
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other side many
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things
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think
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lifestyle is important for the social club or
fashionable
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, in the era right now everything
need
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money
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if you
want
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have something and most
people
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want to have a
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lot of
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money
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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