Job satisfaction is more important than big salary. Do you agree or disagree?
Currently
more Add a comma
Currently,
people
will choose a big salary
because they always follow the new fashion, and follow the ego for
have a new product. I strongly agree for big Change preposition
to
salary
important than job
satisfaction
I will explain more below: Firstly
, why I am choose
agree because in my opinion Add the particle
choose to
money
is everything if you want to buy something you must have money
, explain other people
always need money
for bought
something, Change preposition
to buy
money
is important in the word you can buy something, you can go everywhere if you have money
. If you stressed
at Add a missing verb
are stressed
the
work you can holiday for the stress release and Correct article usage
apply
holiday
need Correct article usage
a holiday
money
for going
. Another point Change preposition
to go
in
consider, Change preposition
to
many
Add a missing verb
is many
people
want to nig salary
Correct article usage
a salary
than
Correct quantifier usage
more than
job
satisfaction
and don’t care about job
satisfaction
because focus many people
just big salary
and as long as I have money
I can do anything can go anywhere and I can buy something if I want the item that, many people
always want to have a lot
Add the preposition
lot of
money
for the following new trend fashion, new technology. This
is a habit that is
often done by many people
. In conclusion, there is
many Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
have
Correct pronoun usage
who have
the
ego Correct article usage
apply
satisfaction
for choose
Change the verb form
choosing
big
Correct article usage
a big
salary
than
Rephrase
rather than
job
satisfaction
. The
other side many Change preposition
On the
people
things
lifestyle is important for the social club or Correct your spelling
think
fashionable
, in the era right now everything Replace the word
fashion
need
Change the verb form
needs
money
if you want
have something and most Add the particle
want to
people
want to have a lot
Add the preposition
lot of
money
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite