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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates
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how much has been spent on
books
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 in four countries from 1995 to 2005.
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, there was a notable trend that Germany has been
dominanted
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dominated
 the top country
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 the
consumtion
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consumption
in
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books
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 over the period,
while
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 France , Italy and
Austria
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also
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 increased their cost after ten years. Looking at the details, in 1995, Germany was the highest country in money spent on
books
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 with 80
millions
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, it was almost 20
percent
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 higher than France and Italy, and 50
percent
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 bigger than
Austria
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.
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Austrian
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 was the lowest consumers in the first year of the report. When we look at the
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period
 from 1999 to 2003, it has been
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 that Germany has a slight
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, with approximately 5
percent
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. Contrastly, there was a remarkable increase in
Austria
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. In the
last
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 year of the report, the cost of
books
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 in all regions
grewth
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growth
grew
 significantly. The most
proment
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prominent
 part was
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twofold in
Austria
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 over the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, austria with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending patterns
  • steady increase
  • notable growth
  • highest spending
  • moderate increase
  • significant growth
  • comparative analysis
  • cultural investment
  • economic trends
  • over the period
  • consistently higher
  • between X and Y
  • relative starting point
  • year-on-year increase
  • expenditure on books
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