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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figure for 2025 and 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figure for 2025 and 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given pie chart demonstrates the proportion of the world passenger
car
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production
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 in seven
region
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regions
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 of the world in 2015.
Overall
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, the region of Greater China was the leader of the
car
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production
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 industry,
on the contrary
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,
Middle
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 East only contributed
with
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apply
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a little percentage.
It is clear that
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 the vast majority of
car
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production
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held
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is held
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 by four different parts of the world. Europe and Greater China had
rougly
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roughly
 the half of the
production
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 of
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the car
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car
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cars
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 in 2015 with
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a ratio
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ratio
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ratios
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 of 25% and 26% respectively.
Moreover
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,
one fifth
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one-fifth
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 of the
production
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made
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was made
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 by North America which was only %3 more than their Japan/Korea counterpart.
On the other hand
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, many countries'
car
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production
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 percentages
was
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were
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 less than 10% in 2015. South Africa ,
for instance
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 , had
8
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an 8
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%
car
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production
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 rate which was more than the combination of South America's (%4) and Africa's (%2)
car
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production
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 ratio.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • projected figures
  • population growth
  • decline
  • initial population
  • highlight
  • differences
  • compare
  • expected changes
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • entire period
  • contributing factors
  • birth rates
  • immigration
  • economic conditions
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