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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to will shops in town and cities closing

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In recent years trends in shopping have increased. The reason is that now a day’s technology is more gathering with human life. In these environments, people are more busy with work life. Many believe in
this
 situation one day lead online shopping shops will be closed. So, I part lily agree with the above statement. I would like to explain my point of view and give some relevant examples in
further
 paragraphs. On the first point, many of them love online shopping. Who is buying online shopping; they will be so happy and able to be more comfortable.
Therefore
 currently money is
time
. There are doesn’t like
time
 wasting. They don’t have so much free
time
. Physically purchasing
things
 cannot do any
time
. Maybe most of the shops will be closed around 10.00 pm. As an example Even at a festival
time
, if X” mas
time
 people want to buy so many
things
 but they don’t have a fixed
time
. so from
time
 to
time
 want to purchase so many
things
.
This
 requirement cannot be fulfilled with a physical purchase. There is got fixed
time
. By the way online purchases are no more any limited
time
. Any
time
 they can buy. If the requirement comes in the middle of the night they want to only open the online app.
Afterward
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, they can purchase under their requirements.
Second,
my point of view is there are several
things
 want to buy offline. Some goods have where a human touch is necessary to decide before purchasing. When we are purchased
jewelry
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jewellery
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 customers must be visual clarification. In recent is that
things
 are valuable.
Furthermore
, the texture of everything can be taking a decision.
To conclude
, I partially agree with
th
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the
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