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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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The given image illustrates the map of Garlsdon
town
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 with a population of 65,000 in which two possible sites are selected for a new supermarket. On overview, the
town
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 can be divided concentrically in which if we move towards the
centre
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 we will come across the countryside, followed by the housing and the industrial area, and
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 at the
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 is the
town
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centre
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. Coming to the roads, there are three roads each connecting industrial are to three different towns. The first one is a 16-kilometre
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 towards Brandon which has around 15,000 inhabitants. The second one is a 25-kilometre
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 towards Cranston with a 29,000 population. And
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, a
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 towards the 12-kilometre
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 to Hinton with 10,000 inhabitants.
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, the railway line runs across the map from northwest to southeast. The housing area is on the north and south side of the industrial area. The first site is on the north-western side of the countryside which is at the periphery of the
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.
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, the second site is in the
centre
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 of the
town
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 where there is no traffic zone.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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