The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The given table illustrates the average
age
of men and women when they retired in 6 countries namely: Australia, the USA, Japan, Italy, France and Korea in 2003.
Overall
, Korea had the highest retirement age
, as compared to others while
the opposite was true for France.
Looking at the table for more detail, Australian and American males retired at the
average Correct article usage
an
age
around
65 Change preposition
of around
years
while
this
figure for females was approximately 64 years
. The average retirement age
of men in Japan was 67 years
and a third,
which was more than 7 months
of this
figure for women in this
nation. Besides
, males and females in Korea retired at the average age
68
Change preposition
of 68
years
and 8 months
, and 67 years
and 2 months
, respectively.
Moving to Italy, while
the average retirement age
of men in Italy was 58 years
and 2 months
, these statistics for women was
less by 11 Correct subject-verb agreement
were
months
. These figures for French males and females were the lowest at around 57 years
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