Considering that adults spend much of their lives at work, having job satisfaction is extremely important. What factors contributes to job satisfaction ? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all employees ?

There is no doubt that elder
person
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people
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spend more time at
work
,
due to
some responsibilities and other
factors
, as well
job
satisfactions
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satisfaction
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is played
major
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role at
work
.
This
essay will explain regarding
factors
contributes
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for
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job
pleasure, and
practically
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expections
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expectations
of
work
gratifications for all workers.
To begin
with, Money is required in
this
contemprory
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contemporary
era, so individuals have
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a job
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job
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jobs
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in
there
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their
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daily routine lives. There are various
factors
contributes
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for
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peace
of
mind
on
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at
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works
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work
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,
such
as
decent
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a decent
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boss, Good colleague,
good
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a good
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job
environment,
best
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the best
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management system,
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
, holidays, Event/Activities, and so on. First of all, Companies need to
maintance
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maintain
their policy, In policy not mentioned
to
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much restriction
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,
however
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it would be
bad
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impact on employment. For
instances
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, One was
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compnay
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company
having
with
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too
much
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many
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restrictions,
such
as Late coming marks will cut half
salaries
,
taken
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taking
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leave without informed to the management system would be cut double
salaries
, and
others
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other
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rules, and
due to
those
rule
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rules
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all
employed
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employees
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has been
striked
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struck
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and left
job
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their job
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, so It would be
most
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the most
a most
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impact on
company
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the company
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.
Furthermore
,
Boss
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should
good
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be good
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at their behaviour, he/she can not raise their voice
in
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about
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emplyees
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employee
mistake
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mistakes
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, but they should explain them
in to
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polite way.
Additional
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,
Environment
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also
good
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well
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played role
for
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peace
of
mind
or
satisfactions
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satisfaction
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, Negative
colleague
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colleagues
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will
destroyed
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our
peace
of
mind
, and some individuals played the game of
pollitic
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politics
politic
at
office
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the office
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.
Moreover
,
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also
played
great
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role in gratification, Harder
worker
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workers
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deserved good
salaries
compared to lazy employees, when they discussed with each
others
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other
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, it would most negative impact on workers lives. It
is practically think
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that
peoples
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people
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required satisfaction
on
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in
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their
job
. If companies organised any event or
activites
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activities
activity
,
such
as any sports,
game
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games
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,
dramma
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drama
, and
other kind
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another kind
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of activities, individuals should
participated
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participate
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, so they will get enjoyed during
work
and as well
mind
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minds
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will fresh. Organised should give weekends for two days,
hence
workers get a chance to take a rest and take
another duties
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. To be concluded,
Adult
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spend too much time on
the
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apply
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work
, and
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their mind
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mind
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minds
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would be
in
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at
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the
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apply
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peace
, and most major
factors
goese
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go
on
biggest
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the biggest
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firm's policy and
another
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another factor
other factors
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factors
. I would like to suggest that
firm
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the firm
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should provide
the
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apply
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good
accomodation
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accommodation
to the employees, as well they need to represented sessions for behaviour with all employees and how to make friendly
surrounding
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surroundings
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.
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