Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?
There have been controversial debates on whether brutality from
media
and computer games affect
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affects
the
society adversely. In Correct article usage
apply
this
essay, I am going to elucidate that there are factors should
be considered to prevent violence. It is widely believed that Correct pronoun usage
that should
media
and computer games have a negative effects
on the society. Correct the article-noun agreement
a negative effect
negative effects
To begin
with, some television shows such
as wresting
or action Correct your spelling
wrestling
movie
were first produced to act as Fix the agreement mistake
movies
an entertaining methods
for Correct the article-noun agreement
an entertaining method
entertaining methods
cititzens
during their past times. As time goes by, young Correct your spelling
citizens
people
tend to imitate the movement of the wrestler at home, or they might have a
desire to experience the speed as the actor in Fast and Change the article
the
Furios
did. Correct your spelling
Furious
As a result
, numerous cases of injury from dislocated joint
to traffic Fix the agreement mistake
joints
accident
have been reported to the authority. Another case of Fix the agreement mistake
accidents
GTA
franchise Correct article usage
the GTA
where
players immerse themselves in covert activities Add a missing verb
is where
such
as commiting
a bank robbery or attempting murder in order to complete a mission. These may Correct your spelling
committing
commuting
instill
a false sense of Change the spelling
instil
reality
Add an article
the reality
of
the world they are living in and make them go down the criminal path. Change preposition
in
However
, I belive
that there are other factors that could affect an individual's Correct your spelling
believe
behaviors
and if they are not put under Change the spelling
behaviours
well
consideration, detrimental influences could stem from them. The first aspect is social Change the adverb
good
media
. With the advance of digital
era, smartphones with social Add an article
the digital
media
platforms play an indispensible
part Correct your spelling
indispensable
of
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in
human's
life. Change noun form
human
People
, espeacially
the young generations, are fed with numerous content these days. Most of the videos or images are not suitable for viewers, some might be made by individuals who lead a criminal life; Correct your spelling
especially
therefore
, the youth might listen to their philosophy and idolize them, thereby having a chance to turn a criminal life. Furthermore
, education plays a key factor on
children's Change preposition
in
behavior
. There have been several cases of school Change the spelling
behaviour
shootout
, a result action of individuals who suffer from social isolation and lack of social sympathy. Had the school and institution's authority paid more attention, solutions would have been taken to mitigate the problem. In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
shootouts
while
many people
argue that television and video games affect on
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apply
people
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people's
behavior
, I would contend that there Change the spelling
behaviour
more
aspects Add a missing verb
are more
should
be put a heavier emphasis Correct pronoun usage
that should
such
as social media
restriction
and school's ways of controlling students.Fix the agreement mistake
restrictions
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion