A bar chart shows the percentage of men and women in Great Britain who had driving licenses and another bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who applied for driving licenses at the age of 17-20. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

A bar chart shows the percentage of men and women in Great Britain who had driving licenses and another bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who applied for driving licenses at the age of 17-20. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below displays the percentage between two
gender
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who had driving licenses and the
number
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of boys and girls who already applied for driving licenses when they at
young
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age between 17 and 20 years old in Great Britain.
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, it is obvious that two fingers
growth
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steadily over
this
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period in the first bar chart, the
number
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of men who had license more than
women
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in the first year in the survey.
However
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, the percentage of
women
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increased dramatically, reaching 60
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percent
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in the
last
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year. In the second chart, the figures
of
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two
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rose slightly between 1996 and 2006. In 1976, 70
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percent
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of males had passed the driving exam and got licenses, after that five years the
number
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still remained.
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, the
number
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rises gently and
finally
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peaked
80
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at 80
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percent
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in 2006. In comparison, the finger of females stranded
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30
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percent
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in 1976 and began growth suddenly over the period, reaching 60
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percent
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in 2006.
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the other hand, 50
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percent
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per cent
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of young men drivers compared with 30
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percent
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per cent
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of
teenager
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women
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drivers in 1996. Ten years ago, in 2006 the percentage of males decreased slightly to 45
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percent
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per cent
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while
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the
number
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of
women
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declined to 20
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percent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, women, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • trend
  • highlight
  • period
  • comparison
  • driving license
  • applicants
  • age group
  • gender difference
  • trend analysis
  • significant differences
  • apply for a license
  • relation
  • overall
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