The line graph gives information about the number of people in 4 distinct age groups going to the cinema once or more than once a month in Europe between 2000 and 2011.
The line graph gives information about the number of
people
in 4 distinct age groups going to the cinema once or more than once a month in Europe between 2000 and 2011.
Overall
, while
the percentage of 7-to 35-year-olds
cinemagoers witnessed a significant upward trend, the opposite was true for the elderly with a slight increase. Correct your spelling
35-year-old
Moreover
, it is clear that
the rate of the young cinemagoers has the highest percent
during the 11-year period.
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people
in their thirties- five started at the lowest point with about 2 percent
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cinema goers
who are in 7-14, 25-35 and 35 and over age groups saw a slight fluctuation before increasing gradually to 15, 9 and 2 Add a hyphen
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people
in 2004.
In the second half of the research period, the rate of children and adults going to the cinema both fluctuated dramatically, then
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people
fluctuated significantly during the 2006-2009 period, which reached a peak at 52 percent
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while
the elderly’s percentage continued to grow gradually to nearly 10 percent
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at the end
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