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The pie charts illustrate the portion of students at one university in the UK who can speak other languages besides English, in the years 2000 and 2010.

The pie charts illustrate the portion of students at one university in the UK who can speak other languages besides English, in the years 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the portion of
students
 at one university in the UK who can speak other languages
besides
 English, in the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, the data experienced an increasing trend in terms of
students
 that were able to speak Spanish and another language. Meanwhile, the opposite trend for
students
 could speak in French and no other language. In 2000, the proportion of pupils who were able to speak Spanish was the highest than other languages at a
third,
and
this
 portion increased to 35%
in
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10 years later.
In addition
, similar to the Spanish figure,
students
 seemed to be able to speak both one and two languages, which was going up by 5% in 2010. Unfortunately, the proportion of
students
 who could speak
in
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German remained stable (10%) in the given period. At another glance, it can be noticeable that pupils
had
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 the ability to communicate in French or another language witnessed a
decrease
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 trend. These portions declined
around
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 half from the initial portion over a decade.
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