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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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rewaling
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revealing
 the
rate
 of used
internet
 in daily life for four age types in between 2003 to 2006 .
Overall
, when the ages are going to down , the
rate
 of used
internet
is climb
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 the
ledder
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ladder
lender
leader
. It is evident that young
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people
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peoples
 used
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 more than old
peoples
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people
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. Between 2003 and 2004
figure
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 stayed constant
in
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at
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 the youngest'
rate
with
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of
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 80
percent
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per cent
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. After
reached
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 a peak for one year ,
this
rate
 fell steadily for one year to almost 90
percent
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.
In contrast
, the
rate
 always
stay
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 under 60
percent
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 for both 55-64
years
 and 65+
years
 .In fact ,
ın
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in
 2003 65+ people did not use
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 until 2004 . After 2004 there was a
slightly
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 decline in
rate
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the rate
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 of used
internet
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the internet
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 for 65+
years
 people . The oldest
peoples'
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people's
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rate
 reach 20
percent
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per cent
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 in 2006.
In addition
, the
rate
 shows it is almost
same
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the same
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 in both ages 24-44 and 45-54 . Until 2006 55-64
peoples
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people
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 used
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 more than 25-44
years
peoples
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people
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, internet, peoples, percent, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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