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The pie charts represent 6 different regions that utilized water for industrial, agricultural and domestic purposes.

The pie charts represent 6 different regions that utilized water for industrial, agricultural and domestic purposes.
#regions #water #purposes
Given are six pie charts revealing the
usage
water
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 for
industrial
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the industrial
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 , agricultural and domestic
area
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areas
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 in six parts of the world .
Overall
, agricultural
usage
 is the most popular one in the four regions . It is evident that
ın
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in
 general
Asia
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 agricultural rate is the highest rank with over
the
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80
percent
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. There was
a
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two
 things which
is
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are
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industrial
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the industrial
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 and domestic rate under
the
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15
percent
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per cent
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 in
two
 Asia regions .
In addition
, Africa
follow
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follows
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 the same path
with
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as
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 Asians . In contrary , by looking at
the
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Europe , we can clearly see the rose
at
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in
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the
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industrial
usage
acounding
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accounting
for
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at
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53
percent
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per cent
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. Water
usage
 for domestic is almost one to
two
 of agricultural
usage
 in Europe . In
America
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American
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 regions , there was a huge
differents
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different
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 in water
usage
. Industrial
usage
 is moving between 48 to 10 between
two
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the two
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side
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sides
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 of America,
also
 we can see it same
think
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thing
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 in agricultural
usage
 .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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