Nowadays, children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some think that these activities are not beneficial for a child’s mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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is an activity that most
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children
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enjoy
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in the morning or at night before going to
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bed. Eating breakfast
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watching TV
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become a habit for many
children
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. Meanwhile, a lot of
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also
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play
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games
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after dinner
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night or until midnight. In my opinion, watching
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and playing
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games
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too much does not have
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beneficial because it will make
children
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depression, anxiety, chronic neck and back problems, lower test scores, did not have much time to sleep. Another reason why it is not beneficial, it can
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take away their time to do some other activities like exercise, reading, and playing with friends. There are
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a lot of channels on
television
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that
children
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can not watch
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as drug or alcohol
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. But there are
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some benefits
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watching
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and playing
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games
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. Watching
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can
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relaxation and
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a good
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feeling. They
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can learn about live lessons, important values,
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and socialization
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, and gain a lot of information
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watching
an educational channels
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an educational channel
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. Some channels like news, discovery, and
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event will make them aware of
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and other people. By playing
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games
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, they will figure
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out about the
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and think the strategy to win the
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. In conclusion,
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children
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are enjoy and happy
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watching
television
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and playing
video
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games
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, these activities will make their mental health not stable like anxiety and depression. They should do other
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and socialize with other
children
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • exposure to violence
  • addiction
  • reduced physical activity
  • hand-eye coordination
  • strategic thinking
  • multitasking skills
  • moderation
  • parental guidance
  • balanced approach
  • screen time
  • social interaction
  • sense of community
  • social skills
  • social isolation
  • alternative activities
  • outdoor activities
  • family interaction
  • mental health issues
  • educational programs
  • problem-solving games
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