The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
The table gives information about the
poverty
rate
in Australia
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in
1999
according
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family
types
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type
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. There are 6 family
types
in the table.
Overall
, the
poverty
rate
in all households
Australia
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in Australia
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in 1999 is 11% which means about 1,837,000 people. Across all family
types
,
poverty
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the poverty
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rate
is highest in
sole parent
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sole-parent
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families
with 21%
whereas
poverty
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the poverty
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rate
is the lowest in aged couple
families
with 4%. comparison of
sole parent
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sole-parent
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families
with
couples
with
children
reveals that
sole parent
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sole-parent
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families
experience almost twice as much
poverty
as
couples
with
children
. The
poverty
rate
is 21% and 12% respectively. A comparison of
single family
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single-family
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type with
children
and
couples
with no
children
shows that their
poverty
rate
is 19% and 7% respectively.
This
means singles with no
children
experience almost three times more
poverty
than
couples
with no
children
.
Poverty
rates aged
couples
and single aged person type of
families
seem to be rather similar with 4%
and
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respectively. The data shows that all
single family
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single-family
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types
experience more
poverty
than their married counterparts.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, rate, types, families, couples, children with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • categories
  • families
  • poverty
  • single-parent
  • childcare
  • income
  • couples
  • dependents
  • older adults
  • pensions
  • unemployed
  • financial resources
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