The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
The table gives information about the
poverty
rate
in Australia j n
1999 Correct your spelling
in
according
family Add the preposition
toaccording
types
. There are 6 family Fix the agreement mistake
type
types
in the table.
Overall
, the poverty
rate
in all households Australia
in 1999 is 11% which means about 1,837,000 people. Across all family Change preposition
in Australia
types
, poverty
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the poverty
rate
is highest in sole parent
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sole-parent
families
with 21% whereas
poverty
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the poverty
rate
is the lowest in aged couple families
with 4%.
comparison of sole parent
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sole-parent
families
with couples
with children
reveals that sole parent
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sole-parent
families
experience almost twice as much poverty
as couples
with children
. The poverty
rate
is 21% and 12% respectively.
A comparison of single family
type with Add a hyphen
single-family
children
and couples
with no children
shows that their poverty
rate
is 19% and 7% respectively. This
means singles with no children
experience almost three times more poverty
than couples
with no children
.
Poverty
rates aged couples
and single aged person type of families
seem to be rather similar with 4% and
respectively.
The data shows that all Correct word choice
apply
single family
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single-family
types
experience more poverty
than their married counterparts.Submitted by mervecaglakahraman on
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