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Alternative energy sources that use the natural power of the wind, wave and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil and gas that we use to power our cities and transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is argued that alternative
energy
sources
such
 as solar power, wave and
wind
 are costly and they are not a good substitute compared to the traditional
energy
sources
such
 as coil, oil and gas in cities and transport.
This
 essay totally disagrees with that statement. I believe that green
energy
sources
 are inexpensive as they are maintenance
cost
 is low, and those
energy
sources
 have no
cost
 Sustainable
energy
 has a lower maintenance
cost
 because once the solar panels
,
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 and
wind
 turbines are built, they do not require any after-
cost
. The rate of failures or breakdowns of the equipment is rare and low. My house will be a great example of
this
. Once solar panels were installed on my rooftop, our family do not have to pay any additional keep-up costs, and there is no problem arose since the installation. Renewable energies do not have any
cost
, as those
sources
 are free, and it is available widely everywhere. Since
wind
 and wave are naturally occurring, there are no costs and those
energy
sources
 are renewable, meaning that they do not run out, unlike coal, oil and gases.
For instance
, Sydney's government do not
tohave
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to have
have
 allocate money for sourcing sunlight,
wind
 or waves as these
energy
sources
 are renewable and accessible from anywhere. In conclusion, green
energy
sources
 are cheaper than traditional
energy
sources
 because they do not have any maintenance fees and there is no
cost
 for sun,
wind
 and wave.
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