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Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favour.

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In the present era , Government take many
initiative
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 for smoking tobacco in public places ,
its
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it's
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 a good initiative taken by the government for
people
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 health and
pollution-free
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 environment where every person spends their life in better health . Nowadays few countries passed
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restriction
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 in public places like offices and restaurants, it is a good
initiatives
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 raised by the government
,
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 because smoking is very dangerous for health if any life smokes in public places its
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 dangerous to other people, smoking
body
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 and others get infected with
bigger
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 disease like cancer and heart disease and environment
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 damage . Smoking
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 damages the environment in smoking areas no one gets fresh air and sonification
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 feels in that smoking areas . on the one ,hand some other countries have no rules or regulations about smoking tobacco , No person
argue
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 with
the
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another individual , All people smoke freely in public areas and restaurants.' in ,offices all workers freely smoke at their
desk
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 not go to smoking
space
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 and are free to work without any hindrance . In my opinion, Countries administration has taken excellent decisions because of numerous diseases expending through smoke,
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 initiative would stop the upcoming infections.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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