The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future.

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future.
The given diagram illustrates the comparison of the Australian
water
supply system at present and future
time
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times
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. In brief, the importance of
water
treatment
plant
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plants
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will enrich and
river
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the river
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is not going to use in the future. Moving to the details,
in
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the present dam and storage divide pure and wasted
water
, and expose waste to
water
treatment
plants
and pure
water
to households, shops etc simultaneously. After that,
water
which is used in the public flow to
plants
for waste, and to rivers for storms.
On the other hand
, in the future pure
water
will be exposed only from dams to society,and
also
other pure
water
is going to flow to communities from the
plants
.At the same time, the public will expose both waste and
storm
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stormwater
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water
to
plants
,
while
no
water
will go to rivers.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, plants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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