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The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future.

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future.
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The given diagram illustrates the comparison of the Australian
water
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 supply system at present and future
time
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times
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. In brief, the importance of
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 treatment
plant
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plants
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 will enrich and
river
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the river
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 is not going to use in the future. Moving to the details,
in
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apply
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the present dam and storage divide pure and wasted
water
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, and expose waste to
water
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 treatment
plants
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 and pure
water
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 to households, shops etc simultaneously. After that,
water
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 which is used in the public flow to
plants
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 for waste, and to rivers for storms.
On the other hand
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, in the future pure
water
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 will be exposed only from dams to society,and
also
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 other pure
water
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 is going to flow to communities from the
plants
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.At the same time, the public will expose both waste and
storm
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stormwater
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water
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 to
plants
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,
while
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 no
water
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 will go to rivers.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, plants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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