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When choosing the best candidate for a job, employers should consider personal qualities more than qualification and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#candidate #job #employers #qualities #qualification
Every person has
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plenty of abilities that make him special and qualified to get
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 right
job
 . In my opinion only qualification
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 enough we should consider other factors. In
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 many
candidate
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candidates
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 with bad
GPA
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 in university
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a
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dificalities
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difficulties
 finding a
job
 because
empoloyers
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employers
 only focus on the degree or result they had when they were studying in college and I believe
this
 is a
worng
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wrong
 way and unfair for the candidates .
Instead
 what employers should do is
to
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meet the candidate and perhaps sit
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 interview to give them
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apply
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 for a
job
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this
 way will allow the candidate to show what abilities and
quilties
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qualities
 may he got and
therefor
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therefore
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, a new chance to do his best and show
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the employers that he or she
deserve
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deserves
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this
oppotunity
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opportunity
.
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as
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also
 a golden chance for
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those who
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 might need
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people for the
job
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