The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.

The line graphs illustrate the

amount

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of people using the train in Sydney

during

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the

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1995 until 2004 and

shows

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the percentage of the

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number

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of trains that were on time over the same period of years. The line of the

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of passengers significantly increases at the same time that significant train delays

occured

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when more people started to increase the use

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transport. Data shows that between 1995 and 1999 the use of

passsengers

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passengers

slightly increased,

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the

trains

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running on time started decreasing a 20% until 1997 and

suddently

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went back

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increasing a 20%. The peak of people using the train happened in 2001 and significantly

droping

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dropping

2002

remainimg

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remaining

stable until 2004.

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another drop of 20% occurs during

the

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2000 when

the

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85% of the trains

where

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late and

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sharply again in 2003 and drops significantly to 70% in the

last

year.