The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.

The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.
The line graph above demonstrates the number of people
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surveyed
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the Tourist Information office in a
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municipality
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on individual, letter/email, and telephone from January to June
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2011.
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