The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world

The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world
The pie chart above depicts the percentage of consumption and production of
coffee
in different nations.
Besides
, it
also
provide
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data regarding
to
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profit distribution in
this
sector economy.
To begin
with,
its
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obvious that Europe is the largest
coffee
consumers
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with
the
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share
of 41%, followed by America as
a
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the
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second largest
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for 39%, a figure of 80% combined from both nations.
Meanwhile
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Japan
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consumption
only
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at
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8%, and the remaining
for
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12% is consumed by the rest of the world. South Africa is the largest
coffee
producer with
share
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a share
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of 44%, and
then
the second largest
by
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apply
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Indonesia with
contribution
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the contribution
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of 22% from total global production.
This
figure
followed
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by Japan and Vietnam with
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the proportion
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proportion
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proportions
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of 18% and 16% respectively. Intriguingly, the
share
of
Japan
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coffee
consumption
relatively
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much
more
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lower despite
of
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its reputation as
fourth
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the fourth
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largest
coffee
producer globally. The highest profit distribution
contributed
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was contributed
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by
delivery
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the delivery
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sector, a figure
more
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of more
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than half.
Retailer
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get
this
share
almost by quarter, and
then
followed by producers and exporters
accounted
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accounting
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for 15% and 10% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, share with synonyms.
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