The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
The bar depicted the proportion of expenses of five different categories in the United
States
, Canada, the United Kingdom and
Japan
within
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2009. The most prominent figures were Food, Accommodation and Transportation accounted for the highest rate, whilst Medical
Expense
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and Fashion were lower. Regarding the expense of Food,
Japan
witnessed the greatest proportion-about 23%, as opposed to the United
States
, which accounted for roughly 13%.
Nonetheless
, The United
States
was the most ubiquitous country in terms of spending for accommodation with more than
one fourth
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,
while
Canada remained the least referred with
one fifth
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, respectively.
In addition
, Canadians spent 20% of their total expenditure on Transportation,
whereas
Japan
accounted for one-tenth, which was the lowest figure. In terms of Medical care and Fashion, the United
States
was the most dominant nation for the former and remained the lowest rank for the latter, with less than one-tenth and roughly 4%. The lowest figures
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Healthcare belonged to the United Kingdom, roughly 3%.
While
Canada had the highest rate of Clothing,
this
nation and
Japan
shared the second position in terms of Health care with 7% and 4%, respectively.
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