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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experiences and developing soft skill is more important. Discuss both view and give ur opinion

#university #education #job #hand #people #experiences #skill #ur
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Some
people
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 support the argument that going through tertiary schooling is the most assured means to getting
work
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 others believe that getting and building skills on the job is of greater value. Assuredly, both sides of the divide have valid points, my view is that getting a degree puts you at a greater advantage over those who focus on skills acquisition as you get to receive high wages and perform jobs with greater importance. On the one hand, quite a number of blue-collar jobs exist and
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 employment does not require a
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 degree. These employees begin their careers right out of secondary school, start at entry-level positions and climb up the corporate ladder, some even end up in managerial positions without needing a
college
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 certificate.
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 , a growing number of secondary school graduates in Kaduna are choosing to start working immediately and forgo attending university.
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people
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 are extremely content to do
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 sort of
work
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 so long as it meets their needs and there is room for promotion.
On the other hand
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 ,
people
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 who complete
college
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 and receive certificates as professionals are able to be placed in more important, higher-paying
work
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 roles. Because there are so few of these highly skilled
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 available, they tend to find jobs faster.
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 is exemplified by careers in the medical field
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 as nursing; and since there will always be
people
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 falling sick, nurse graduates commence treating sick
people
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 as soon as they are employed by a health facility.
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, schooling is important, but whether to
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 studies beyond secondary school or just build skills as you
work
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 is up for debate. I firmly believe that it is better to go through
college
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 and become a professional first because
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 , you get access to high salaries and more social impact for your service delivery.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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