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The chart illustrates the percentage of male and female executives in seven different types of profession across the UK in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.

The chart illustrates the percentage of male and female executives in seven different types of profession across the UK in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.
The given chart depicts the proportion of executive professionals
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 gender identity in seven different work fields in the UK in 2007.
Overall
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, women had the biggest share in teaching by a staggering ratio of 90%
while
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 men performed the same score in construction. In more detail, both genders had equal participation in journalism.
On the contrary
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, males acquired a bigger share in science by accumulating 60% of the field,
although
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 women occupied the vast majority as therapists by leading with an impressive 80%.
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 but not least, the representation in law was evenly distributed in general but men were ahead by a narrow margin of 10%.
However
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, the allocation in journalism was almost identical with the main difference being that the majority was in favour of female workers.

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