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People today are increasingly use credit card to make monthly purchase. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's world,
the
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apply
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money
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 is
being
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converted from cash notes to digital currency, respectively, plastic
cards
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.
This
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 type of funds
are
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is
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 often used in the form of
credit
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 from the bank that needs to
paid
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be paid
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 on a certain bill date,
nonetheless
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 if
date
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the date
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 is missed, it could lead to many problems. Having said that
credit
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card
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cards
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 do provide certain convenience, rewards and cheap currency exchange.
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, the benefits are more in comparison to the drawbacks.
Firstly
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,
one
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 of the major
advantage
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advantages
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 of plastic
money
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 is that it provides convenience to use for the reason that
risk
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the risk
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 of theft or losing bills is
to
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at
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 the minimum. Nowadays, many banks provide
with
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the
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higher
credit
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 limits which
allows
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user
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users
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 to spend worry-free and if in case it gets lost or stolen,
cards
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 could be blocked
by
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with
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one
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 click.
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, the rewards like 5 per cent
cash back
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cashback
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 or discounts
attracts
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 more people to use it frequently.
As a consequence
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, humans trust it and save
money
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 by paying through
the
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cards
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 rather than keeping cash with them all the time.
Secondly
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, with the usage of
such
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 payment
method
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methods
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, individuals are able to build their
credit
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 scores which in future enables them to get 0 per cent financing. Certainly, these scores play a key role in buying things like
house
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houses
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,
car
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cars
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, mobile phones etc. as all
the
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mortgage
company
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companies
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 consider it in
first
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the first
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 place.
For example
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, the loan to buy a home
of
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apply
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worth 1 million will not be approved if
one
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 has low
borrow
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borrowing
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 ratings and if it is highest,
one
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 might get financing with no interest rate.
Subsequently
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, the entire payment cycle is tied to
one
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 single card in contemplation to buy greater things in life, human has to depend on it. Howbeit, on the downside, it is easy to overspend since
money
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 is not going through
pocket
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the pocket
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.
One
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 might get into
pitfall
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a pitfall
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 of
debts
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debt
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,
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 if the
credit
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 bills are paid in full.
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, if any monthly payment is missed, it might damage the
credit
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 score. Altogether, it is a source of business
to
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for
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 banks. In conclusion, even though there are some limitations of
credit
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 payments like debts and low scores, the pros are considerably greater as it is convenient to pay with the
cards
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 and
risk
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the risk
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 involved is very low.
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