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The tree pie charts below show the change in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tree pie charts below show the change in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts are illustrating how much money
did
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a particular school in the United Kingdom spent per year for the
years
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1981, 1991 and 2001. Units are measured in percentages.
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, it can be seen that the biggest part of the resources
were
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 invested in
teacher's
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teachers'
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 salaries in all of the
years
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. Spending for things like books and physical improvements varied with time and insurance was the lowest expenditure for all of the
years
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. Paying their educational staff was the biggest spending in all three
years
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 (40% in 1981, 45% in 2001 and a peak of 50% in 1991). Insurance
payment
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payments
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 fluctuated between 2% in the first year and slightly raised
at
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 8% in the
last
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 year, but it still was the smallest part of the budget. Other workers' salaries percentage decreased through the
years
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 (28%, 22% and 15% respectively). Other things like resources and furniture and equipment varied between 9% and 23%
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 but yet remained in the middle of the chart fraction.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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