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Today, some food travels thousands of miles from farms to consumers. Some people think that it would be better to our environment and economy if people only eat locally produced food. To what extent do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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importation policies and local governmental regulations create a significant challenge for some authorities to incorporate the appropriate measures. Some people believe it is economically
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 if they consume locally produced
food
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 I will discuss
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how the disadvantages outweigh the advantages of
this
 current debate. On one hand, consuming locally
manefactured
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manufactured
food
 encourages citizens to invest in and financially support their domestic companies which in turn maximizes the internal profit.
Additionally
, some companies find it affordable to use local materials in their own factories.
Moreover
, it creates more profit for these companies and
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 more jobs for
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 population and
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 market satisfaction.
On the other hand
, eating only locally produced
food
 can create a decline in the diverse foods produced by certain countries which highly varies geographically what can and can not be
manifactured
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manufactured
.
Therefore
, some people find it wise to intertwine both local and exported goods in their
food
 as it allows them to choose between the products that will not be available locally. In summary, I believe that having a combination of both locally produced
food
 and imported
food
 is beneficial for a healthy and thriving economy. As it improves the country's capacity to create diverse relationships with neighbouring countries and
hence
, a consistent rise
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 the economy
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can
also
 be achieved through marketing and agricultural deals between countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • locally produced
  • sustainable farming
  • agricultural exports
  • food miles
  • economic sustainability
  • seasonal produce
  • carbon emissions
  • food sovereignty
  • local economy
  • agro-biodiversity
  • supply chain
  • global trade
  • food security
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