The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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in various generations did exercise regularly in 2010.

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, what stands out from the graph is that

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female figures were roughly identical regardless of age, male ones had differences across generations. Meanwhile, more men enjoyed physical activity on a regular basis in almost all age groups except those who were the youngest.

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less than a half of

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did sports routinely, technically 47.7% for those

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between 15 and 24 and 48.9% for between 25 and 34,

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women from 35 to 64 indicated their figure around 53%.

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, seniors aged over 65 showed a similar trend to the young, standing at 47.1%. Turning to men, we can see that their

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tended to decrease as their age.

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the highest percentage can be seen in males aged between 15 and 24 at 52.8%, the figure was reduced in the prior generations and the lowest ratio, 39.5%, was for those who were from 35 to 44.

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, the older men recaught their exercise routine and the oldest generation depicted

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high percentage at 46.7%.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Physical activity
Regular exercise
Age demographics
Participation rate
Trend analysis
Gender disparity
Health initiatives
Public health policies
Statistical comparison
Lifestyle choices
Work commitments
Age-related factors
Preventative health
Exercise habits
Surveillance data
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