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In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule? Use specific reasons and details to support your position.

#countries #people #smoke #places #office #buildings #rule #support #position
Every year the
goverment
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government
try
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 to improve our
lifes
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lives
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 and create new rules for us. One of them is to disallow smoking in public
places
, but there are advantages and disadvantages in
such
decision
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. In
this
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 I would like to compare
pros
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the pros
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 and cons and explain my position. On the one hand, smoking has
huge
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 impact on health,
but
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not just for
people
, who
smoke
,
moreover
 for those, who are nearby.
People
, who
smoke
 most likely will have
the
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some type of
the
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cancer,
also
 it may have
impact
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an impact
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 on your reproductive system.
For example
, the
smoke
 from the
cigarrets
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cigarettes
consist
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70
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%
of
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the
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nicotine and CO, so everyone could be
the
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 passive smoker, but that
even
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is even
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worther
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worse
then
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than
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 to
smoke
 itself. Passive
smokers
 could have the same issue with their
healt
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health
,
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 but do not even know why, as they could do sport
everyday
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 and eat just healthy food.
On the other hand
,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should prepare specific
places
 for
smokers
, as it is
the
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 bad habit,
which
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 they cannot get rid
with
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of with
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 ease in one moment.
For instance
, most of the public
places
 in my home town are not prepared for
the
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smokers
 and non-
smokers
people
. There
no
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 room to separate
peoples
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people
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 with children and those, who want to
smoke
 during
the
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dinner. Most likely, that will be crucial
spends
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 from the
cities
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city's
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 budgets to create additional spaces and areas. To summarize,
that
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the good point
to
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 don't allow
peaople
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people
 to
smoke
 in public
places
, but we should take care of the area for
smokers
 as well, as it is not that simple to get rid of
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awfull
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awful
habit
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 for most
of
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the
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people
. If I were
smoker
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a smoker
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, I would like to have
the
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 specific place to take a rest with
the
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coffee and cigarette
,
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 and
do
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not disturb any other non-
smokers
.
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