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Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins.

#plastic #money #replacements #credit #debit #cards #banknotes #coins
It
it
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cetrainly
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certainly
 true that today
the
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most
people
 rely on
plastic
money
 namely,
credit
 and
debit
cards
instead
 of traditional
method
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methods
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 like
,
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bannknotes
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banknotes
 and
conins
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coins
. In my perspective, the advantages of
plastic
money
such
 as
,
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 convenience, healthy outweigh the disadvantages including, cybercrime. On the one hand, there are several downsides
of
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to
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 using
plastic
money
. To start with,
people
 who
utilizing
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credit
cards
 and
debit
cards
 are more
valunerable
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vulnerable
 to
become
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becoming
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victimes
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victims
 of cybercrime.
This
 is because some criminals make fake websites and
then
steel
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steal
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 the
money
 of
people
.
Second
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 disadvantage,
the
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is the
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plastic
money
 using harmful materials to the ecosystem namely,
plastic
.
This
 is the
some
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same
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 types of
plastic
 using in
credit
cards
 unrecyclable ,which
this
 can contribute to water pollution.
For example
 , some individuals discard
from
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their old
credit
cards
 in oceans or rivers.
Therefore
,
this
 can
leads
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 to
ngeative
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negative
 consequences
in
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 marine life and leads some to extinction.
In other words
 , some animals can eat
this
plastic
 and even
death
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.
On the other hand
, I would like to argue that
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merits of using
plastic
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the plastic
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 method to purchase outweigh
demerits
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the demerits
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.
Firstly
, using
credit
 and
debit
cards
 can leads to reduce
a
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 chance of spreading diseases.
This
 is because
the
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credit
 and
debit
cards
 do not
to
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transfer from
people
 to another.
For example
, when
Covid-19
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 pandemic started
the
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governments worldwide
recommeded
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recommended
people
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that people
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using
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use
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credit
cards
 in order to prevent
spread
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the spread
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 of
this
 disease.
Secondly
, the
credit
 and
debit
cards
 are more comfortable.
For instance
,
people
 can buy any goods globally
by
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with
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 only
simple
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a simple
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 click on the mouse without
need
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the need
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 to
to
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meet sellers.
To sum up
, In my opinion, The benefits of
plastic
money
such
 as
,
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 health,
comfortable
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and comfortable
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, outweigh the downsides namely, cybercrime,
environmental
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and environmental
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 issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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