Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins.

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bannknotes
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banknotes
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coins
. In my perspective, the advantages of
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convenience, healthy outweigh the disadvantages including, cybercrime. On the one hand, there are several downsides
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using
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money
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credit
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are more
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victims
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the
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of
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plastic
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using harmful materials to the ecosystem namely,
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types of
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using in
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can contribute to water pollution.
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their old
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in oceans or rivers.
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marine life and leads some to extinction.
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method to purchase outweigh
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transfer from
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governments worldwide
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recommended
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people
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disease.
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meet sellers.
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money
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health,
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and comfortable
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, outweigh the downsides namely, cybercrime,
environmental
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issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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