The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

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THE GIVEN PIE DIAGRAMS ILLUSTRATE THE PROPORTION OF CONTRIBUTION OF DIFFERENT REGIONS OF THE INDUSTRY TOWARDS THE ECONOMY OF TURKEY IN 200 AND 2016.

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, THE AGRICULTURE, HEALTH AND EDUCATION SECTORS TOOK THE MOST PART IN ESTABLISHING THE COUNTRY'S ECONOMY IN BOTH YEARS,

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THE LEAST BENEFICIAL DEPARTMENTS WERE CONSTRUCTION, FINANCE AND BUSINESS-RELATED DOMAINS BECAUSE OF THE FINANCIAL SITUATIONS. IN THE YEAR 2000, THE AGRICULTURAL SYSTEM BOOMED AND GAVE THE MAXIMUM PROFIT OF 24%, BUT THE CONSTRUCTION INDUSTRY COULD NOT MAKE MUCH AND MADE THE LOWEST PROFIT OF 3% ,

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, THE MANUFACTURING AND UTILITY INDUSTRIES PERCENTAGES INCREASED FROM 8% AND 14% IN 2000 TO 12% AND 16% IN 2016.

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, IN 2016, HEALTH AND EDUCATION SUPPORTED THE COUNTRY BY HAVING THE HIGHEST PERCENTAGE OF 17%, WHICH BY CHANCE WAS THE SAME IN 2000 AS WELL.

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, THE FINANCE INDUSTRY TOOK A HIT AND HAD THE LEAST FRACTION OF ONLY 8%, WHICH IS STILL 2% MORE THAN WHAT IT WAS IN 2000,

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, THE LEISURE AND GOVERNMENT SECTOR'S PROPORTION DECREASED FROM 17% AND 12% IN 2000 TO 14% TO 9% IN 2016

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