The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

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The given pie charts illustrate the information regarding the contribution of different industrial units in the Turkish'

economy

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parcentage

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wise in the years between 2000 and 2016.

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, at the beginning of time, agriculture made a huge contribution to the

economy

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whilst, construction was the smallest part of the chart. In the end, the highest contribution was shown by health and education and the least contributed portion was of finance, business and others. To start with, construction contributed 3% to the

economy

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of Turkey in 2000 and increased by more than three folds, reached to one-tenth in 2016. Trade utilities and transportation

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14% and had a slight rise of 2%. The part of manufacturing and finance business was 8% and 5% which rose to 12% and 8% respectively.

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, in 2005 agriculture had a role of about one-quarter in the Turkish'

economy

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and in 2016 it showed a decline of 10%. The Percentage of government and leisure and hospitality was 12% and 17% respectively, which made a

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decrease and was 9% and 14%.

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, the health and education department showed no change and remained constant throughout the given time period.

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The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

Some people believe that sleeping is the only method which allows people to get enough relaxation. Others belleve that physical activities such as playing games and exercises also provide enough relaxation. Discuss both views and provide your opinion.

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