The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart shows several changes
of
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in
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indicators about
people’s
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people
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born in
Australia
and
were
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was
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born outside
Australia
that living in cities, rural
areas
and towns
between
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for
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15 years.
Overall
, there are significant changes in
people
who
living
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live
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in cities and towns and rural
areas
was changed dramatically.
People
who are living in rural
areas
decreased nearly twice in both
group
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groups
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to
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in
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2010. In 1995
people
that were born in
Australia
and living in urban
areas
(over 40%) less than
people
that were born outside
Australia
(60%)
According to
the chart
people
that
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living in towns
to
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in
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2010 declined slightly
additionally
in
1995
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,1995
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the graph presents 20% of
people
that were born in
Australia
and under 20% of
people
that were born outside
Australia
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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