The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart shows several changes
of
indicators about Change preposition
in
people’s
born in Change noun form
people
Australia
and were
born outside Change the verb form
was
Australia
that living in cities, rural areas
and towns between
15 years.
Change preposition
for
Overall
, there are significant changes in people
who living
in cities and towns and rural Change the form of the verb
live
areas
was changed dramatically.
People
who are living in rural areas
decreased nearly twice in both group
Fix the agreement mistake
groups
to
2010. In 1995 Change preposition
in
people
that were born in Australia
and living in urban areas
(over 40%) less than people
that were born outside Australia
(60%)
According to
the chart people
that
living in townsCorrect word choice
apply
to
2010 declined slightly Change preposition
in
additionally
in 1995
the graph presents 20% of Add a comma
,1995
people
that were born in Australia
and under 20% of people
that were born outside Australia
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