The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.

The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.
The pie chart above depicts various
resources
of
energy
produced in France in the two different periods, 1995 and 2005 or two decades.
According to
the data provided, in 1995 gas, petro and coal almost as unrenewable
resources
contributed equally to
energy
generated for just below one-third for each
categories
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, at 29,63%, 29,27% 29,80% respectively. Meanwhile, nuclear contribution as renewable
resources
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resource
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accounted for 6,40% of total
energy
, and the remaining stood at 4,90% come from unknown
resources
. In 2005, the portion of gas and coal toward
energy
production increased slightly to 30,31% and 30,93% each,
meanwhile
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petro share fell to 19,55%.
On the other hand
, nuclear as
source
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a source
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of renewable
energy
has soared by 3,70% to 10,10%,
similarly
for other
resources
has climbed to 9,10% by 4,20%. From the
statictics
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statistics
, we can see that there was
lack
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of dependence on gas,
petro
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petrol
and coal as unrenewable
resources
due to
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the increase
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increase
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increasing
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in nuclear utilisation as a renewable resource.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resources, energy with synonyms.
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