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the chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchase by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchase by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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the bar chart indicates the
percentage
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 of businesses in
e-commerce
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 purchasing by industry in Canada from 2015 to 2019. There were five
categories
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 of
e-commerce
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 purchasing, they were manufacturing, construction, wholesale, retail and
information
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 and
communication
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. Among the five
categories
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, clearly seen that the highest
percentage
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 of providing
e-commerce
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 purchases was
information
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 and
communication
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. The rest of the
categories
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 had a similar trend year by year. The smallest
percentage
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 was in the construction sector in 2015. In 2015, the sales of products in
e-commerce
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 were the lowest only reaching 20% and the highest was
information
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 and
communication
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. Starting from 2016 to 2018, the
percentage
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 of businesses providing
e-commerce
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 purchases increased regularly for all almost
categories
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 except manufacturing. In
this
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 field, the trend increased starting from 2017 to 2019. The biggest purchasing of
e-commerce
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 businesses was
information
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 and
communication
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 which was above 70%.
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,
this
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 sector slightly decreased in the
last
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 year to almost 70%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, e-commerce, categories, information, communication with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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