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the chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchase by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchase by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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the bar chart indicates the
percentage
 of businesses in
e-commerce
 purchasing by industry in Canada from 2015 to 2019. There were five
categories
 of
e-commerce
 purchasing, they were manufacturing, construction, wholesale, retail and
information
 and
communication
. Among the five
categories
, clearly seen that the highest
percentage
 of providing
e-commerce
 purchases was
information
 and
communication
. The rest of the
categories
 had a similar trend year by year. The smallest
percentage
 was in the construction sector in 2015. In 2015, the sales of products in
e-commerce
 were the lowest only reaching 20% and the highest was
information
 and
communication
. Starting from 2016 to 2018, the
percentage
 of businesses providing
e-commerce
 purchases increased regularly for all almost
categories
 except manufacturing. In
this
 field, the trend increased starting from 2017 to 2019. The biggest purchasing of
e-commerce
 businesses was
information
 and
communication
 which was above 70%.
However
,
this
 sector slightly decreased in the
last
 year to almost 70%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, e-commerce, categories, information, communication with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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