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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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The provided line graph illustrates the
number
 of borrowing
books
 from 4 village libraries including West Eaton, Ryeslip, Sutton Wood, and Church Mount, between
June
 and
September
 2014. Meanwhile, the accompanying pie chart describes the ratio of the borrowed
books
’ typed.
To begin
 with, both West Eaton and Church Mount libraries experienced an upward trend in the
number
 of borrowed
books
, which started from 50
books
 in
June
,
then
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 slightly increased to 150
books
 in
September
.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of
books
 borrowed from Ryeslip dramatically dropped from 300
books
 in
June
 to around 175
books
 in
September
. As for Sutton Wood, the
number
 of borrowed
books
were
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fluctuated. In
June
, there were 250 borrowed
books
, which
then
 significantly decreased to 100
books
 in August.
However
, it reached its peak in
September
 with around 300 borrowed
books
. It can be seen from the chart that, almost half of borrowed
books
 were fiction, with 43%. The other types of book
fraction
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 were much smaller, 19% of borrowed
books
 were Biography, followed by science, history, and self-help, at 14% for both history and science, 10% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, june, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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