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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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The provided line graph illustrates the
number
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 of borrowing
books
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 from 4 village libraries including West Eaton, Ryeslip, Sutton Wood, and Church Mount, between
June
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 and
September
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 2014. Meanwhile, the accompanying pie chart describes the ratio of the borrowed
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’ typed.
To begin
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 with, both West Eaton and Church Mount libraries experienced an upward trend in the
number
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 of borrowed
books
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, which started from 50
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 in
June
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,
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then
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and then
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 slightly increased to 150
books
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 in
September
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.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
books
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 borrowed from Ryeslip dramatically dropped from 300
books
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 in
June
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 to around 175
books
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 in
September
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. As for Sutton Wood, the
number
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 of borrowed
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were
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fluctuated. In
June
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, there were 250 borrowed
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, which
then
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 significantly decreased to 100
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 in August.
However
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, it reached its peak in
September
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 with around 300 borrowed
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. It can be seen from the chart that, almost half of borrowed
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 were fiction, with 43%. The other types of book
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 were much smaller, 19% of borrowed
books
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 were Biography, followed by science, history, and self-help, at 14% for both history and science, 10% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, june, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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