Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays, Earth is facing
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the
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pollutants which are created
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many factors, especially wrapping bags. Some individuals agree that
manufactures
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and malls should be responsible to decrease
amount
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the amount
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of packing of
goods
while
others think that
customers
should prevent buying from packaging. In my point of view, I tend to agree with the former. On one hand, companies should take
responsibilities
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of
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packing as their
productions
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are made by them
as well as
the wrapping added. Some
customers
may not have enough patience to untie the wrapping covering the product, especially the thick one. So the part covering can be easily thrown away which leads to
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pollution.
Moreover
, with enormous wrapping parts, we
also
need the same sizes of places to store them and recycle
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some purpose which can become pollutants. In order to reduce the amount of pollution,
manufactures
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and supermarkets should minimize the amount of packaging to avoid those factors leading to
pollutions
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pollution
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.
On the other hand
,
customers
should
also
be aware to avoid buying
goods
with a lot of packaging. In some cases, the products must need a bag or a covering part to save them from impacts, so
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wrapping parts is inevitable.
Therefore
,
customers
should be aware of putting covering
part
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parts
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in the right places and choose productions having little packing if they are not ready to handle the packing of
goods
.
Otherwise
, both buying products and the production
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a thick cover
depend
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on the need of
customers
so they should be responsible for packing. In conclusion, both individuals from two sides have their own reasons to support their opinion,
however
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I tend to agree with the view that
customers
should take responsibility for avoiding buying
goods
with a lot of packing
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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