The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who are 5 portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart below demonstrates the percentage of people who daily ate 5 meals containing fruit and vegetables in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
, throughout the whole period, women
showed the highest score while
children
had the lowest percentage.
Firstly
, men and children
were the same for the first three years, children
had 10% and women
had a little bit higher 15 %. In contrast
, women
kept increasing from the beginning until it reached it is peak
of 35 % in 2006. Add an article
the peak
a peak
Furthermore
, the highest percentage of men was in the last
two years of the time period. According to
the data, for juveniles, the biggest score was in 2006 and 2007 over 25%.
To sum up
, women
's meals per day had the biggest number of fruit and vegetables. Moreover
, men increased throughout the period, and in the last
year was about 25 %. After 2006, women
slightly declined and in 2008 they attained 30 %.In 2008 children
had a gradual drop which is why they end up at nearly 25 %.Submitted by maat2074 on
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