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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who are 5 portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who are 5 portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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The bar chart below demonstrates the percentage of people who daily ate 5 meals containing fruit and vegetables in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
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, throughout the whole period,
women
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 showed the highest score
while
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children
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 had the lowest percentage.
Firstly
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, men and
children
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 were the same for the first three years,
children
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 had 10% and
women
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 had a little bit higher 15 %.
In contrast
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,
women
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 kept increasing from the beginning until it reached it is
peak
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 of 35 % in 2006.
Furthermore
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, the highest percentage of men was in the
last
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 two years of the time period.
According to
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 the data, for juveniles, the biggest score was in 2006 and 2007 over 25%.
To sum up
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,
women
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's meals per day had the biggest number of fruit and vegetables.
Moreover
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, men increased throughout the period, and in the
last
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 year was about 25 %. After 2006,
women
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 slightly declined and in 2008 they attained 30 %.In 2008
children
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 had a gradual drop which is why they end up at nearly 25 %.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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