The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
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the trendline of global
water
used by three different areas between 1900 to 2000.
Overall
,
maximum
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the maximum
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volume of
water
was used by
agriculture
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the agriculture
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sector as
compare
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to other sectors. More
water
was consumed per person in Brazil than
Congo
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in Congo
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. In 1900,
agriculture
used the most consumption with around 500 km3, followed by industrial
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and
domestic
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the domestic
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side used around 100km3
similarly
.
Then
, fifty years later,
agriculture
raised
up
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to
be
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over
than
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1,000km3, factory increased being 200km3,
however
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local
site
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still
was
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stagnant for consuming
water
. In 2000,
agriculture
plagued to
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3,000 km3, industrial jumped to
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1,000 km3, and domestic
also
increased to
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200 km3 used the
water
.
Moreover
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the comparison of
water
used between Brazil and
Democratic
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the Democratic
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Republic of Congo in 2000. Brazil with
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number of population is 176 million; irrigation land is 26,500km2, they are using
water
is
359m3
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359 m3
per person.
Then
, compare with Congo, the population in
this
country is 5.2 million and the irrigated land is 100km2, they consumed
water
around 8m3
for
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per person.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, agriculture, km with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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