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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these point of views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 support the opinion that it is great to
work
 in the same
organization
all
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 their
working
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,
while
 others disagree with
this
 idea and believe that they should not
work
 in the same loop, working for different organizations is better. In the following paragraph, both of these views will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. It is undeniable that
most old
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 generation
have
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 had a mindset that
people
 should not change their jobs several times. Working in
a
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 same company throughout their working life can affect them to grow up in their career paths.
For instance
, employees spending many years in the same
organization
 would have an opportunity to be
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higher position.
In addition
, most
company
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companies
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 will increase
a
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 salary for their officers every
years
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such
 as 15% or 20%
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 their based incomes, depending on how long the employees
work
 for them.
On the other hand
, another group argues that it is not necessary to
work
 at the same company
over
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 the whole working life and it would be better to change a job. At
the
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present, it is normal that
people
 always change a job because they have a chance to find a job they love.
Furthermore
, moving an
organization
 can receive more experiences and meet new society that would be fit
to
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 you. In conclusion, it can be seen that these two opinions on working in the same or diffident
organization
 are a very personal
question
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 for many
people
. Both of these have their own benefits but
for
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me
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 as a young generation has agreed with the second opinion.
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