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Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. they also can do many things that man cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men’s, although they have to sacrifice a lot for their family and career. It is said a woman’s place is in the home what do you think?

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Women
 have shown that they have the capability to do numerous things better than
men
 and even do those that
men
 cannot. Unfortunately,
while
 they have done lots of incredible things at the cost of affecting their family or career, they are not appreciated as much as they deserve. I am strongly against the opinion that
women
 should be restricted in home chores and believe that they play more crucial roles. How
women
 are both physically and mentally different from
men
 is an undeniable fact.
Due to
 their nature, they are more patient, making them better options for careers like teachers in which they deal with children.
Moreover
, in Islamic countries like Iran,
due to
 some religious limitations, there are some job vacancies that should be fulfilled just by
women
.
For example
, only
women
 are allowed to be
woman’s
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nurse
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.
This
 is why females have made noticeable
progressIn
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progress
 in these fields. If
women
restricted
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 in home chores, it may lead to negative consequences. First of all, these limitations affect their mood, resulting in
unfavorable
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 effects on
whole
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 family, like depression.
Moreover
, in
the
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 world
that
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 lots of people struggle with financial problems, if females do not work,
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the family
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family
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 lose one of their income sources.
This
 approach may lead to
financial
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 burden for
family
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the family
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as well as
 more pressure on
men
. Some may argue that woman would better
to
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put their energy
for
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 home chores, but it is not sound rational since If it had not been for woman’s progress in
scientific
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 world, we would not have benefited from our current situation.
In addition
 ,
women
 have proved how they are able to strike a balance between all their responsibilities. In conclusion, I
strongly
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 against the opinion that
women
 should be restricted in
house
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the house
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 and think as they have the potential to do numerous things better than
men
, they deserve
it
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apply
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to be appreciated and supported.
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