The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the production of frozen microwaveable frozen fish
pie
.
This
is a 3 stages process and each of them
have
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subprocesses.
Overall
, one
stages
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involves
potatoes
, the second main stage is about the filling of the
pie
, and
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stage is
main
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product being
storage
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to dispatch. The production of the base of the
pie
starts with
potatoes
being delivered, it is important to know that they need to be
usen
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used
up to one month after the reception. The
potatoes
under
goes
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to a
sequency
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sequence
of procedures, which is cleaning,
pealing
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, slicing, boiling and chilling. After the sliced
potatoes
are
in
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the correct temperature they will be stored. The filling part of the
pie
process starts with the fish being delivered, in
this
case
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salmon
.
Due to
safety reasons, the
salmon
needs to be used up to 12 hours after the
deliver
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. The
salmon
will be steamed in an oven after being seasoned with lemon juice and salt.
The next step is
a hand process of removing skins and bones,
this
is
then
overlooked by an inspector. If the safe the prepared peas and sauce will be added to the
salmon
to
then
be added to the
pie
base and wrapped in a microwaveable container that will be frozen and stored to be dispatched.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, potatoes, salmon with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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