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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Making distinguish between wrong and right is an essential task that
children
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 have to learn.
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 some argue that
punishment
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 is a practical way to teach them how to behave properly. I think that it may result in negative outcomes, and believe
teachers
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 and
parents
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 are better to apply some restrictions for
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 rather than
punishment
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.
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 some may believe that
punishment
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 is time efficient way of teaching
children
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 and
parents
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 its results soon, it may lead to negative consequences.
Children
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 will be familiar with aggressive
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 and imitate their
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, applying it in their relationships with friends or even
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 next generations.
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,
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 brings nothing but a sense of fear. Being under
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 pressure for a long time,
children
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 may lose their confidence. It is an undeniable fact that those who
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 not enough confidence would not make progress either in their professional, or personal life. If
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 or
teachers
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 want to punish
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, I think it should not be physical
punishment
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 in any circumstances. In terms of
teachers
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, they can apply some restrictions for
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 and ask them to do all their assignments and if they do not pay attention to discipline, remove their break time.
parents
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also
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 can Deprive
children
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 facilities. If
children
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 develop a bad manner,
parents
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 can restrict their access to video games or cell phones, discouraging them from
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behavior
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. In conclusion, I believe
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 is not a rational
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 for teaching
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 about the difference between moral and immoral activities as it may have reverse effects on their character. I think
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 and
teachers
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 should apply gentle approaches to deter them from doing improper actions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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