The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.

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The provided diagram illustrates the process of how the

glass

is shaped.

Overall

, there are a total of 7 main stages in the process.

To begin

with, the

glass

is put into a furnace at 105 degree Celsius,

then

the heated

glass

is pressed into a mould1 until it turned into a perfect shape

according to

the

mould

. After that, a container which is a thick wall is added into a mould2.

Next,

the

glass

is added into a mould2

along with

the air in order to strengthen the

glass

into a bigger shape. In the subsequence stage, the

glass

is heated in a kiln at 482 degree Celsius,

then

it is put into a cooling machine at 25 degree Celsius. After the cooling process, the shaping

glass

is finished in

Correct article usage

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perfect shape. In the final stage, the shaping

glass

then

packed in a box ready for delivery,

while

the leftover

glass

is considered

Change preposition

apply

show examples

waste.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

158 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.

There is a problem in your street. Write a letter to the local town council explaining who you are, what the problem is and what you hope will be done about it.

With the widespread use of interent , more and more peolpe choose to work from home. Do the advantage of this trend outwight the disadvantage?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Some people say that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others think that those who contribute to society like scientists and teachers are more successful. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

You stayed at a hotel last week. After you got home, you realized that you had left your watch behind. Write a letter to the hotel manager and explain what happened. Describe the watch and ask them to help you find it.